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    dots Submission Name: Wishing for Her Love {Part Ten}dots
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    Author: EbonyBlood
    ASL Info:    14/F/Can.
    Elite Ratio:    3.7 - 79/79/73
    Words: 370
    Class/Type: Story/Love
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       Sorry. This one was kinda of late. Though starting this Friday, I'm going to post a chapter each Friday. (: Yes, so be prepared for each Friday and Each new chapter!


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    dotsWishing for Her Love {Part Ten}dots
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    I found myself in my bed, but remembered falling asleep under the bed. Someone must have moved me.

    I crawled out of bed, and opened the door. I could her Rick and Dan.
    "Where is everyone?" I asked.
    "Oh, they're at the hospital." Dan answered, Rick jumped up, "Wanna go do a puzzle?"

    I really wanted to know how Jeff was doing, but I nodded and decided to wait. I rubbed the sleep from my eyes and went down stairs with him.

    "When did I fall asleep?" I asked, fitting two pieces together. "Um, not long after I came in really, I told my mom and she put you in your bed."
    "Oh."
    "Are you sad?"
    "I'm more worried I guess." I fidgeted with my thumbs, then continued the puzzle.
    "They said they don't know about his condition."
    I looked down. "What do you think happened?"
    "I don't know really, Your Mom just called my mom and said for us to come over quick, so we did. I knew you would go to your room, for some reason."
    "I was really scared..For my whole life...I've never really felt like anyone loved me. My parents don't want me, and my grandparents can't 'afford' me. Your family seems to have really accepted me," tears began to fall from my eyes. "I just..I felt so happy for the first time when you accepted me into the family. I was so happy! I couldn't even say how happy I was. I love Claire and Jeff...They're like.. The parents I never had."

    Rick hugged me. "You don't need to cry Melinda, of course we accept you!"
    I sobbed into his shoulder, and hugged him back. As scared as I was, I was even more happy to be here with Claire and Jeff.


    For the first time, I really saw that...I had a family.
    And I knew at that time what family really meant, and how it felt.

    Was this the thing I needed to complete my life?
    Or was there more to it?

    I'd wonder for some more time yet. Could my life really stay this wonderful?




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      im glad u have finally written another chapter i have been checking since i finished the last...anywayz keep up the good work and i will keep reading
    ~Shelby
    | Posted on 2007-06-13 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]


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