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    dots Submission Name: Old Waysdots
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    Author: Gmann
    ASL Info:    19/M/WA
    Elite Ratio:    2.98 - 98/125/73
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Depressed
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    dotsOld Waysdots
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    I heard your voice the other night,
    The one that used to make me light,
    Donít listen to much of you these days;
    Itís not a sensible way to live.
    I donít wear my belts anymore,
    And I sleep completely naked,
    Itís not that I miss the old ways,
    I lost my ways, country sunset rays,
    Itís just that Iím not really sure if this is the Ďmeí I want to keep.

    I keep my face delicate and my mouth shut,
    Donít wear anything too get involved or emotional,
    Itís not that Iíd be turned away,
    I just wouldnít be as promotional.
    I still have somethings, an image of unavailability,
    Unquestioned answers,
    Is this what I wanted to make of us?




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