Cool poem...some of the images don't click with me as well as I would like but I guess thats just your style,
But most were very impressive:
"i dream through entire forests
in the dark"
I guess its not really an image,but a feeling (almost like a lucid dream,which sometimes I get),anyways that was cool.
"i stroke the sun
with the sensual crest of my tongue
& i can taste the orange
in the palm of my eye
& through my ears
"the lemon of pink" adores
everything that is"
It probably couldnt have been written any other way to the same effect and I guess when i look past the wording of it (which is just strange to me) theres an image there that is unique,someone eyeing up the sun,almost able to taste it,grab it or whatever,but its almost trippy (and no Im not a stoner),but what Im saying is,even though I wouldnt write it that way,it does seem to work for me and therefore is refreshing.
anyways nice poem,seems very original in a good sense,