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    dots Submission Name: A Clerihewdots

    Author: annie0888
    ASL Info:    49/f/LA
    Elite Ratio:    4.76 - 327/382/122
    Words: 30
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
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       Jason, When I googled the senryu, I also found out about another form. Thanks for my new addiction. This is the kind of crap that will occupy my mind when I should be studying!

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    dotsA Clerihewdots

    Paris Hilton - heir d'hotel -
    She rings for her servants to treat her swell.
    They bring breakfast, lunch, and supper t' boot
    And launder and press her orange jumpsuit.

    Submitted on 2007-06-12 23:42:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    Paris Hilton is just a silly, rich snob who gets drunk and falls down in the street wearing pink clothes and saying over and over:

    "(slurred) I'm hot! I'm hot!"

    Actually, Paris, you're not.

    I think it is funny that even in prison she still, in a sense, receives plenty of service.

    Does she think that tears can wipe away a misdemeanor?
    Or saline rivers can drown the accusation?

    I think not, Paris, I think not.

    Anyways, you made me chuckle and smile with this. Excellent work!
    | Posted on 2007-06-13 00:00:00 | by manwithnoname | [ Reply to This ]
      I love it. Satire is one of my favorite forms of poetry to read. Of course I'm a sarcastic person. Plus I hate Paris Hilton, she's such a waste of air. Great write. I like how it's so short, that's how I believe satire should be. If it's too long it's just not as funny.

    And weed for all!
    | Posted on 2007-06-13 00:00:00 | by Magic Dragon | [ Reply to This ]
      Hahah love it :) short, sweet (if you aren't a fan of Paris Hilton). The t' was useful as well because that's how my accent is so I didn't feel as if I had to make too much effort to enunciate the 'to' when I read it aloud.

    I can't really think of much else to say. Concise poems are good but they leave me with less to mention!

    Thanks for the read, I really enjoyed this one.
    | Posted on 2007-06-13 00:00:00 | by Predator | [ Reply to This ]

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