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    dots Submission Name: Questions.. I feel we all ask our selfs..dots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 359
    Class/Type: Rant/Serious
    Total Views: 526
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       the past couple of days have been tough nevertheless i keep on going.. i suck it up. because tihs is life... the unexpected always seems to happen.


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    dotsQuestions.. I feel we all ask our selfs..dots
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    Why is it so hard...?
    So difficult for some to give recognition to those who, deserve it?

    Why can't we all start acting as humans rather than animals?
    Why is it that we need to make mistakes or hurt a loved one in order to learn what we should already know?

    Please.. tell me why is it I have so many more questions than answers?
    Why is it that it seems as if I have more bad days than good ones?
    How come there is no moderation when it comes to life?

    Why is it that it all happens at once?

    An individual can figure out all their issues, have everything straightened out…

    then....BOMB

    You turn around and there's twice as much of a disaster than there was before!
    And why do some (majority) of us feel as if we have to do it all on our own?

    Why can't we accpect help from others including myself?

    I believe we have become so untrustworthy... so unloyal that is more of a risk to actully allow help from others and than it would be wearing ourselves down by doing it all on our own...

    I feel a lot of us need to sit back relax and allow others to appreciate us,
    Take some time off for themselves

    And then there are others out there… whom need to stop being so self centered
    Stop saying the first thing that comes to your mind and not thinking before speaking…

    And more importantly… Go and appreciate those. people who work so hard to make things so much easier on you.

    I could bet any amount of money that you won’t notice just how much they do until they can no longer do whatever that maybe for you,

    And unfortunately until then I feel people will not give that recognition they deserve…

    Because they my friends are taken for granted… as many of us are.




    Submitted on 2007-06-13 13:23:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      These were excellent, sober reflections, and this was a very good write! Good questions that we all benefitted by reading!
    | Posted on 2007-06-21 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      You were able to come up with some of the questions that we ask ourselves daily, and come up with good responses to them. The only thing that I found needed fixing would be the set-up of this piece. It is a bit jumpy ex:

    Why is it that it all happens at once?

    An individual can figure out all their issues, have everything straightened out…

    BOMB.

    There just seems that there is not clear pattern, unless that is what you were going for.

    Either way nice job
    ~Meagan
    | Posted on 2007-06-14 00:00:00 | by the_truth | [ Reply to This ]


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