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    dots Submission Name: my greenish pantheismdots

    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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    dotsmy greenish pantheismdots

    i've been reverse engineering
    the heart of christ
    as to better facilitate
    the removal
    of this black cauldron summer
    from my faith
    of which i have none blindly
    nor am i devoted
    to any god
    outside of nature itself
    in which i am

    & with my greenish pantheism
    i placate the teeth bearing tigers
    of my youth
    & all the exotic stretches
    of my upside-down bird
    released from the trees
    into a shock of native skies

    when i speak i often wonder
    what i'm saying
    as my words are always running into each other
    with some sort of forceful luxury

    Submitted on 2007-06-13 20:52:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I've skimmed a few of yours and I'm quite impressed. You find words with real impact, without deigning to petty shock value like so many of the angst ridden emo poets on most of these sites.

    "As I dove to the deepest depths of my dark, danky, devouring doom..." blegh!

    I quite like this piece as I myself find I feel more peace
    in the workings of nature and the earthly than I do in the depressing teachings of spiritual virtue. I see a cohesive spirit in nature, a world-wide conciousness if you will though I myself would not be inclined to call it God.

    Other than this all I have to say, or rather to ask, is why this labeled as prose when it's clearly poetry? Unless I'm mistaken prose is, well, what I'm writing now. Sentences and paragraphs structured to form ideas and arguements. Prose is used for stories, essays, articles and the like. Poetry on the other hand is simply words, prefferably as few as possible, carefully chosen and structured in a way to invoke a strong emotional impact in the reader whether or not any clear point is communicated.

    I don't want to insult or offend in any way, I was just curious. Did you think prose was perhaps a term for free-verse poetry, or were you trying to be ironic?
    | Posted on 2007-06-16 00:00:00 | by Rick Vanley | [ Reply to This ]

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