Description: Jase, thanks for your help with the italics. I thought of this silly idea when I was reading a line in a poem without my glasses on. The line was "...your dog's ears flapping in the breeze," but without my glasses it looked like CARS instead of ears. Sorry for the explanation, but I don't think it will make any sense to anyone otherwise. And we all know that poetry MUST make sense!
I thought you said ... -------------------------------------------
Aging, your eyesight starts to blur;
Your hearing fades fast.
On the fringe of a surreal twilight zone-
where a dog’s cars go flapping in the breeze,
you answer every Fuck you
with You’re welcome.
I'm gonna start doing that now. Answer every "[censored] you" with "you're welcome", that'll be fun. Short and good. Even with the explanation, I think the dog's cars line is still random. But if it's what inspired you to write the poem then, by all means, leave it. But hell, what do I know, it's your poem.
I liked this. The idea of replying 'thank you' to and insult just seemed amusing. Don't quite get the line 'where a dog’s cars go flapping in the breeze '. I expect it's supposed to be non-sense making, but it seems a little bit too random.
Also, I don't get the title either. I don't really see the link with the poem. I'm sure there must be some link but I can't see what.
Dunno about starting the first three lines with 'your/you're' works well. It seems to dull the opening a little because it seems more like a list.
Although, I like the narrative being 'you'. It makes a change from 'I', which most poems seem to be in.