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    dots Submission Name: I'm going insane here,dots
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    Author: save me
    ASL Info:    16/F
    Elite Ratio:    1.77 - 21/39/36
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 103
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 756



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    dotsI'm going insane here,dots
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    I need inspiration,
    I'm running dry,
    There's no complications,
    Though I might just die,

    I'm going insane here,
    Can't you see?
    I can hardly shed a tear,
    I need to run and flee,

    Don't you know what it's like?
    When you've got thoughts jumping around in your head,
    You open your mouth, and all your words seem to be dead,
    I just can't see what's ahead,

    I know i'll die here,
    I feel it in my gut,
    No words will come out,
    My mouth is taped shut.

    I'm going insane here,
    Can't you see?
    I can hardly shed a tear,
    I think you'll agree.




    Submitted on 2007-06-14 01:19:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      good poem,” I think you've done a really fine job at expressing your emotions. I do believe that your poem could use some work on the structure to make it complete.it have some nice rhymes ...I like the ending lines ...

    and thos lines was my fav..

    When you've got thoughts jumping
    around in your head,
    You open your mouth,
    and all your words seem to be dead
    | Posted on 2007-06-14 00:00:00 | by muhammed | [ Reply to This ]


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