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    dots Submission Name: nightmaresdots

    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/I am dead inside
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       it kind of sucks but it was on the spot. i want these nightmares to leave. i dontknow how to make them go. every night for the last week or so, they haunt me. they get worse every night.

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    haunting me
    demons of the night
    wanting me

    brave enough
    to touch me while i sleep
    lying here
    scared to count these sheep

    carresses of death
    while i dream
    playing out
    each deadly scene

    in the night
    they wont leave
    i cant fight

    in my sleep
    only to weep

    torture me
    while i rest
    these nightmares
    have gotten the best

    now suicide
    lies in my thoughts
    for what the devil's bought

    as i do this deed
    is all i need

    Submitted on 2007-06-14 09:49:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Quite dark but beautiful at the same time. I believe that the real nightmare however, lies within every humans soul. Everyone has a dark side. I liked it a lot, keep writing and I'll keep reading!

    | Posted on 2007-06-14 00:00:00 | by LadyDoragon | [ Reply to This ]
      Tina, this was excellent! Your rhyme and meter was very good in this and the story was clear to the reader! You have a developing talent that is delightful to read!
    | Posted on 2007-06-14 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Nightmares are hard to deal with and we all have them. Sometimes they are much worse and, for me, that's when stress is running life. I like your honesty. Talking to those you love/trust may help and, of course, writing is a wonderful way to release as well. I look forward to reading more of your work as time permits. Take care, Sharon
    | Posted on 2007-06-14 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]

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