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Only A Dream

Author: bloodydreamer27
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Only A Dream

Friendships never last and love is not true,
And all of these things I found out because of you.
You cheated on me with my so-called best friend,
So I had to make both relationships end.
I was so hurt at the time that I wanted to die,
So I got on top of the tallest building so that I could fly.
I wrote two suicide letters one to my ex & to my so-called friend,
Telling both of them why my life had to end.
I can only hope that when they read them their heart is torn,
And that every single day my death they do mourn.
As I think about what you did I want to die even more,
So I jump off the building so that I can hit the floor.
As I start to fall I see my life flash before my eyes,
And i see the people that I love and the ones that I demise.
I hit the ground moments later and people start to scream,
But then I realize that it was only a dream.

Submitted on 2007-06-14 12:53:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I think this could've had a better flow. But other thna that it was written fine. I liked the emotion and the wording
| Posted on 2007-09-13 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]

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