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    dots Submission Name: Only A Dreamdots
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    Author: bloodydreamer27
    Elite Ratio:    2.19 - 54/130/78
    Words: 183
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsOnly A Dreamdots
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    Friendships never last and love is not true,
    And all of these things I found out because of you.
    You cheated on me with my so-called best friend,
    So I had to make both relationships end.
    I was so hurt at the time that I wanted to die,
    So I got on top of the tallest building so that I could fly.
    I wrote two suicide letters one to my ex & to my so-called friend,
    Telling both of them why my life had to end.
    I can only hope that when they read them their heart is torn,
    And that every single day my death they do mourn.
    As I think about what you did I want to die even more,
    So I jump off the building so that I can hit the floor.
    As I start to fall I see my life flash before my eyes,
    And i see the people that I love and the ones that I demise.
    I hit the ground moments later and people start to scream,
    But then I realize that it was only a dream.




    Submitted on 2007-06-14 12:53:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think this could've had a better flow. But other thna that it was written fine. I liked the emotion and the wording
    | Posted on 2007-09-13 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]


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