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    dots Submission Name: Do It Againdots
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    Author: bloodydreamer27
    Elite Ratio:    2.19 - 54/130/78
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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    Nobody could have guessed what went on inside her head,
    And that every second she was wishing that she was dead.
    She played happy for so long it was almost as if it were real,
    But pain is the only thing that she could ever feel.
    One person hurt her and her whole life changed,
    And thats the one thing that made her deranged.
    She wanted to go back in time to before she met him,
    To the time when she was happy, when life wasn't so dim.
    She knew that couldn't happen so she went to the knife,
    The only thing she knew that could end her life.
    She wrote a suicide note to only him, telling him of her pain,
    Hopeing that after she died he wouldn't go and do it again.




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