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    Author: bloodydreamer27
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    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    We could have been so good together,
    We could have lasted forever.
    But you broke my heart so that all changed,
    And from that day on i've been deranged.
    You told me you loved me but you told her that too,
    After i found that out i didnt know what to do.
    I didnt know whether to leave you or to stay,
    Whether to kill myself or to live another day.
    All these questions in my head are driving me insane,
    The only thing i know is that i'm tired of this pain.
    Please help me choose which path to take,
    So i dont make another huge mistake.




    Submitted on 2007-06-14 12:55:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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