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Tainted


Author: bloodydreamer27
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Words: 112
Class/Type: Poetry /Death
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Tainted



Tainted flowers on the floor,
Next to the girl who's alive no more,
She took her life because of you,
Now tell me what you plan to do.

Tainted sheets on the bed,
Next to the boy with the chopped off head,
He took his life with an axe,
All because you wouldn't let him relax.

Tainted blood on the wall,
Next to the girl who shall forever fall,
She took her life with a gun,
All because you said it was fun.

Tainted grass on the ground,
Next to boy who will never be found,
He took his life with a rope,
All because you took his hope.




Submitted on 2007-06-14 12:57:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  wow what an expression of words
i could feel it as i read it
ouch what pain
| Posted on 2007-06-14 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]


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