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    dots Submission Name: So He Coulddots
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    Author: bloodydreamer27
    Elite Ratio:    2.19 - 54/130/78
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsSo He Coulddots
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    I was broke when he found me then he repaired my heart,
    Just so he could be the one to tear it apart.
    He said that he loved me and would never do me harm,
    Just so he could be the one to put cuts on my arm.
    He told me he would never leave me and that he wouldn't cheat,
    Just so that i could be another person he could defeat.
    He told and did many things to me but i allowed him to,
    Just so that in the end i could have something to do.




    Submitted on 2007-06-14 12:58:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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