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    dots Submission Name: Daddy's Little Defectdots

    Author: bloodydreamer27
    Elite Ratio:    2.19 - 54/130/78
    Words: 166
    Class/Type: Poetry/I hate you
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       I wrote this last year because my dad always blames everything on me, even if it's not my fault.

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    dotsDaddy's Little Defectdots

    I'm daddy's little defect, his every little mistake,
    Everytime he yells at me, its more than i cant take.
    He doesn't know it hurts me, he doesnt know i cry,
    He doesn't know when he does that all i want to do is die.
    I'm daddy's little defect, his every little mistake,
    Everytime he yells at me, a smile i have to fake.
    He thinks everything is perfect, that nothing is wrong,
    I try to be happy, but i've been sad for too long.
    I'm daddy's little defect, his every little mistake,
    Everytime he yells at me, my heart starts to ache.
    With each word my heart breaks, yet he stays the same,
    He continues yelling at me, like i'm the one to blame.
    I'm daddy's little defect, his every little mistake,
    Everytime he yells at me, i quiver and i shake.
    He scares me to much to even think of running away,
    So at home i will stay and his every word i will obey

    Submitted on 2007-06-14 13:00:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i can relate to this,my mother thinks that she is perfect and never wrong and that anything does that goes wrong is automatically my fault, she yells sometimes, and yeah it can really hurt..my dad does the same thing sometimes, my brother is their fav child, and i am just here to do whatever they say....
    this is a really good piece of work
    cant wait to read more of your writing

    | Posted on 2007-08-07 00:00:00 | by IsabellaAurora | [ Reply to This ]
      excellent piece. i loved reading it
    | Posted on 2007-07-13 00:00:00 | by iscreamicry | [ Reply to This ]
      First off I am not going to say that I know how you feel... because people react differently when my father would yell and get drunk I would cut myself and eat pea-nut butter... I felt happy afterwards... you obviously reacted differently... I enjoyed reading this... Grammar wise there wasn’t to much wrong with it... There needed to be a space in Everytime, a few capitalizations, and a comma... I think people blame certain people for there problems because they think that the person can fix them...
    | Posted on 2007-06-15 00:00:00 | by Cricket | [ Reply to This ]

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