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    dots Submission Name: from far awaydots

    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
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       suicide is the only thing running through my head lately. anything to stop this pain. please

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    dotsfrom far awaydots

    fading into darkness
    so the tears will not be seen
    wishing it were true
    but it is not what it seems

    from far away it works
    not so sure when you are near
    but now that you are there
    im wishing you were here

    relationships from far away
    to far to wipe my tears
    not in my bed to wake me
    from the nightmares that i fear

    so screaming by my lonesome
    no one to hear these cries
    falling to the ground
    no one to save me as i die

    Submitted on 2007-06-14 13:32:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      WOW.. so much emotion... and it all fits very well together.. i'm not sure about your other readers but i can def. see this coming stright from your heart, your soul. i can see this is how you feel.. its amazing what we all can do with words and writing when we put effort into it.


    Thanks for posting
    | Posted on 2007-06-15 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
      There is much fine rhyme and meter here....a good (and rare I might add) lyric sound...excellent! bravo ... bravo ... bravo .. michael
    | Posted on 2007-06-14 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]

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