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    dots Submission Name: Ending of a cursed era dots
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    Author: ira
    ASL Info:    21.f.ca
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 238/273/176
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 655
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 896



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    dotsEnding of a cursed era dots
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    Itís over now,
    White wine and flowers now,
    Powdered moon and candies now,
    Weíre falling a bit faster now.
    Party for the sake of fault
    Weíre dancing along side that naked vault
    Where women kiss to close their eyes,
    Sun bathed sweat does hide their ties!
    Itís over now,
    Bathing sick and older now,
    Flaming hearts grow colder now,
    And itís over, over now.
    We all bleed to catch the boulder now,
    Sun sets and deaths be bolder now,
    Sing that song and cloud the clown!
    Rejoice and swing with nothing found!
    Oh joys the music and form the breed!
    We crushed that circle, that circle of life,
    Bred to fight that Queen at night!
    But itís over now,
    Sick joke and royal folk are over now,
    Dead song birdís graves are solid now,
    Its over, over now




    Submitted on 2007-06-14 14:00:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      An interesting vision of good times. I must admit some of the images i dont fully understand but still its a soothing piece. especialy after a long fight if you know what i mean. The carefree atitude of many of the lines gives a sense that one doesnt need much reason to celebrate and has the freedom to do what they want without fear or pain. a nice piece to relax with.
    | Posted on 2007-06-15 00:00:00 | by Seraphim X | [ Reply to This ]


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