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"The feeling of love"

Author: Magger32
ASL Info:    18-female-PA.
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Words: 75
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Standing with my guardian Angle before the sunset. I love to be with him... he is my world, my hope.

Thank you.

"The feeling of love"

Tears dry and Memories fade
But my Feelings will never go away.
I feel love when I dig deep down inside,
You’re the only one, who can make my fears subside,
You make everything that gone wrong in my life worth another try,
I’ll try again because you are ready to stand besides me,
You don’t care that the battle isn’t pretty,
You’ll still stand with me,
i am no longer lonely.

Submitted on 2007-06-14 16:30:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This poem, to me, says alot in these lines I feel the same way about my hero... I know that he'd never abandon me or leave my side...

The poem flows wonderfully and even though there's no rhyme or rhythm your simple words keep it moving Cheers to a lovely post

| Posted on 2007-09-24 00:00:00 | by Lil Sere | [ Reply to This ]

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