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    dots Submission Name: Crystal Night dots
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    Author: atonement
    Elite Ratio:    2.71 - 106/186/98
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsCrystal Night dots
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    The snow falls grey,
    Ash angels leave their mark,
    And I fear what tomorrow brings.

    A promise of freedom,
    but only a glimmering chance,
    and broken with feuds of
    hues of reds and golds.

    Silence, shattered by a scream,
    There is no sun here anymore,
    Porceline Faces smeared with black.

    A shot in the distance,
    A child's closed eyes,
    Terrified of faith.

    Those gone,
    covered with ashes of bodies,
    lay here, souls without rest.

    The glass is broken,
    shinning like crystal,
    like the night sky,
    of a liberal time.




    Submitted on 2007-06-14 17:48:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very strong. I get an image of the destruction brought on by war, possibly; or maybe the sorrow brought by the loss of a loved one. I can't be entirely sure.

    I only hope that you're not actually facing that kind of sadness. Even understanding that life can't always go well, I can't stand seeing others hurting that badly. If you need to rant, I'd be glad to hear you out.

    --crimson
    | Posted on 2007-06-15 00:00:00 | by crimson echo | [ Reply to This ]
      That's a mighty negative picture to be painted by one so young. Tis sad that you might actually see life this way. I hope, for your sake, that this was just a passing feeling.
    | Posted on 2007-06-14 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]


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