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    dots Submission Name: Rewiredots
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    Author: myonlysalvation
    Elite Ratio:    2.11 - 41/48/42
    Words: 187
    Class/Type: Story/Sorry
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    dotsRewiredots
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    did you say the words
    i long to hear
    did you say the words that
    i want to hear?
    & were you just going to leave me there?

    Take me Take me Take me

    lock the door & throw away the key.....
    it was so hard to touch you.
    my finger tips just melt right through.
    &were you just going to walk out on me?

    Take me Take me Take me please

    20 seconds and then you leave.
    did you say the words
    and leave distance between.
    walk slowly away.
    triumph in a seed.
    were you just going to walk out on me?

    take me take me take me

    it was too hard
    my hands just melt right through.
    2 seconds of glory
    i never had you. 2 seconds too soon.
    lock the door &
    throw me the key.

    take me take me take me take me
    take





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