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    dots Submission Name: It Drips With Deathdots
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    Author: myonlysalvation
    Elite Ratio:    2.11 - 41/48/42
    Words: 108
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       I wrote this, I'm Liz's boyfriend. Let us know what you think! It's about my curse.


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    dotsIt Drips With Deathdots
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    Driven by empty lies through each day
    I run, I chase my demise
    the sickness I despise

    I'm not the only one

    My spirit is tested every day
    Rips my soul, I steal, I lie
    You've made so many like this

    I'm not the only one

    She's just as gone
    Pushed so far
    Now broken like us

    I'm not the only one

    She cries in her sleep
    and screams in dreams
    So many like us her soul drips...
    ...it drips with Death.


    -EriK




    Submitted on 2007-06-15 02:22:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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