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    dots Submission Name: Too Often Forgottendots
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    Author: caballero7137
    ASL Info:    22/m/victoriaville
    Elite Ratio:    0.72 - 9/104/123
    Words: 64
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsToo Often Forgottendots
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    Sea urchins of Life
    soaking waves of rays
    along the shorelines
    abounding with tingles
    of two opposite forces
    outlawing worldly worries
    while enjoying the view
    with soft slate eyes
    completed portraits
    correlating through
    the inner child,
    the inner dream
    existing within sparks
    essential to relieve
    disturbing discomfort
    distributed daily.
    So chills with tranquility
    shock the stresses
    till the soul
    tempers in the zone.




    Submitted on 2007-06-15 09:45:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This poem kind of just starts out in the middle of a feeling and then does some heroin and explains the rest of the feeling. Really left me unfulfilled. The human condition is entirely absent. There is not really an original image crafted in the work.
    | Posted on 2007-06-17 00:00:00 | by eliwhitneyradio | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like how you worded this poem. It made me feel relaxed for some reason. Anyway keep writing!

    Anna
    | Posted on 2007-06-15 00:00:00 | by LadyDoragon | [ Reply to This ]


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