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Too Often Forgotten

Author: caballero7137
ASL Info:    22/m/victoriaville
Elite Ratio:    0.72 - 9 /104 /123
Words: 64
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Too Often Forgotten

Sea urchins of Life
soaking waves of rays
along the shorelines
abounding with tingles
of two opposite forces
outlawing worldly worries
while enjoying the view
with soft slate eyes
completed portraits
correlating through
the inner child,
the inner dream
existing within sparks
essential to relieve
disturbing discomfort
distributed daily.
So chills with tranquility
shock the stresses
till the soul
tempers in the zone.

Submitted on 2007-06-15 09:45:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This poem kind of just starts out in the middle of a feeling and then does some heroin and explains the rest of the feeling. Really left me unfulfilled. The human condition is entirely absent. There is not really an original image crafted in the work.
| Posted on 2007-06-17 00:00:00 | by eliwhitneyradio | [ Reply to This ]
  I really like how you worded this poem. It made me feel relaxed for some reason. Anyway keep writing!

| Posted on 2007-06-15 00:00:00 | by LadyDoragon | [ Reply to This ]

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