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    dots Submission Name: Today Was Supposed To Bedots
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    Author: loveispain
    ASL Info:    23/f/ME
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 283/198/51
    Words: 284
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Love
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       *sigh* ....well I think is almost more of a vent..and a way for me to cope with today and what it meant for him...and for me. Clearly....I thought today was going to be the day we'd finally get to be together..and...the way it turned out...it wasn't. I really am OKAY with it...but..not gonna lie...today was a hard one. For sure. But...hey..life goes on...like I told him last night...we never know where life is going to take us...we just live it. And hope that it all turns out right in the end. Today sucked for me...but I know he was the happiest guy in the world...and I take so much comfort and joy in that. :) Good luck to him.


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    Today was supposed to be my miracle.
    The day when all that was wrong,
    Finally became right.
    It was supposed to be the day,
    I wrapped my arms around you,
    For the rest of my life.
    It was the day you'd say,
    That you'd never leave again.
    It was supposed to be worth it today.
    All that time, and the pain, and the effort,
    Of making it last, would finally come to an end.

    I know it's not about ME.
    I just always thought it would be about US.
    As happy as I am for you,
    I didn't even want to open my eyes this morning,
    For I knew the hurt today would cause my heart.
    All that I thought we were,
    And all that I thought we would be,
    Is truly lost in today.
    You start your life,
    And in a way I'm starting mine.
    We have TRULY gone our separate ways.

    I can see myself at the airport,
    Waiting with that smile,
    And the feeling of excitement,
    Of knowing your home to stay.
    But those are just...thoughts.
    Only for a time,
    Could they have ever been my reality.

    I have cried no tears today.
    But there is a sick feeling,
    In that empty spot in my gut,
    That tells me - I'm losing.
    That I'm losing - everything.
    And the only choice I have,
    Is to be okay with that.

    I just shake my head when I think,
    That I waited four years, for today,
    To sit here alone and wonder,
    How it all came down to this.
    The BEST and the WORST part,
    I wouldn't change a thing,
    And I'd do it ALL over again.




    Submitted on 2007-06-15 19:24:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      For I knew the hurt today would cause my heart

    would cause your heart what?



    understanding the disappointment this piece is trying to contain because today didnt turn out how you believed it was sposed to...

    i guess thats what sucks about life. we convince ourselves that all the signs are pointing toward this one thing and then we find out we were reading them backwards or something.
    i knew this man who left his wife of 20 something years. he'd been having an affair for 12 years [and that affair had produced a child] and the woman he had been having that affair with expected that he would come and live with her. however he got a place on his own and some other woman moved in with him leaving her husband for this man because she thought it was a sign from god.
    boys suck.

    and so while i realise that this piece contains an ocean of disappointment and you trying to show that you are okay with all of this. that the fact that the story never ended like you wrote it doesnt bother you i think you could prolly tell the story better.

    there is a lot of unnecessary repetition in this piece that does aid to convincing the reader that everything is okay.
    like... when im pissed off and i tell everyone im okay... i tell them a million times without realising... almost like im trying to convince myself... knowing that im not convincing anyone... and thats kinda what this piece is like... everytime you repeat yourself/idea the piece loses credibility in some ways...

    just something to be aware of i guess.
    i read something just before that spoke of the awareness that his tears would dry up and his heart would find another but he wished it wasnt so... i guess that is the reality... your heart will move on in its own time...

    take care.
    | Posted on 2007-07-11 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      wow!!! wow!!! It's a little bit funny, because today was the first time I come back and comment on someone's work and funnily enough I chose yours. It was something that just happen to catch my eye, I read your piece and I couldnt help but feel for you. That something innafable that brought me here because your words really inspired me.

    I understand so much what you went through and how your day turned out. Your words expressed your emotions beautifully and its sad and beautiful that you went through what you did. Its a great thing when you loose someone you love, but its even more painful when you loose your love to something so mundane it hurts even more

    thanks for your words and for your poem, I loved it

    andrea
    | Posted on 2007-06-15 00:00:00 | by ladydeathstrike | [ Reply to This ]


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