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    dots Submission Name: the opera of blue intentdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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    the opera of blue intent
    is where the starlings gather
    & the winds wip
    is the expulsion
    of my sleeps dreamy cloud
    of seedful wonder

    it's a dulcet sounding
    where i'm at
    with the heartbeats of thunder
    & the moons
    eclipsing in my ear

    & i am brandish in my haunted sky
    & gaudy in my ways

    in the closeness of hours
    the miniature of truth compels
    the rabbit heart to flee

    & memory is ellusive
    when in forgetful breathing
    you are stunning




    Submitted on 2007-06-16 16:07:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is amazing. The imagery is indescribable. I have a hard time critiquing your work, because I'm so drawn into the emotions.
    | Posted on 2008-06-02 00:00:00 | by DemonicInk | [ Reply to This ]
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