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    dots Submission Name: Lovelessdots
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    Author: PrincessOfDark
    ASL Info:    17/F/Tx
    Elite Ratio:    2.2 - 22/31/25
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
    Total Views: 699
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsLovelessdots
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    Lovless
    A word that means one without love
    Which is what I am
    No one cares
    Not even the one person I can be myself around
    The one person I actually love
    Is still in love with his ex
    He cares
    I know he does
    Somewhere beneath that tough exterior I know he cares
    He is just afrid to show it
    I love him
    And before I was afraid to show it
    Because I was afraid he would turn away
    And never talk to me again
    I dont want that to happen
    But it has
    He wont talk to me
    Not because i told him I loved him
    But because I said something really idiotic about his ex
    We havent talked in awhile
    And if he is happy this way
    As long as he is happy I will be happy
    And I wil stay the was I have been
    Loveless




    Submitted on 2007-06-16 17:38:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      don't listen to the first comment you got... a poem doesn't have to rhyme and only a poet can understand that... as for my opinion i love it... keep up the good work. i love your writing and i love the way you express it. and honestly when it comes to those ppl... forget they exist girl. all they do is haunt you in your dreams and in your memories and slow you down from what you can acheive altogether... keep at it...

    Darc Angel
    | Posted on 2008-01-17 00:00:00 | by Darc Angel | [ Reply to This ]
      This isn't exactly a poem to me. Just an unorganized attempt to get out your feelings.

    The first three lines were okay. You could work off of that, but after that, everything is just ranting. There is no meter. No rythm. Nothing.

    I don't mean to be harsh, but if you want it to flow at all, you might want to revise this and put in some rhyming.

    (And as for other advice- you should probably forget about him)

    -Kaitlyn.
    | Posted on 2007-07-27 00:00:00 | by numbertwenty | [ Reply to This ]
      YYYYYYOOOOOOOOOOUUUUUUU!!!!!
    ....
    Go slap him! Yeah, you heard me! Now! What?! I don't care if you're in a tornado! Go slap him!
    SLLLLLLLLAAAAAAAAAPPPPPPPP

    him.

    Why did he dump you? If it was an idiotic reason, you should call the cops no just kidding.

    Stop trying to make him happy. If he won't [censored] talk to you when you try to talk to him, just LEAVE him. There are plenty of fishies in the sea. Go find one that will make you happy. Like an...ANGELFISH! Yea! An angelfish! Don't go near sharks! They make you sad! Very, VERY sad!

    No more sharks, you hear?!
    -Beth
    | Posted on 2007-06-28 00:00:00 | by crimson_panda | [ Reply to This ]


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