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    dots Submission Name: im the shitdots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 216
    Class/Type: Lyrics/I hate you
    Total Views: 673
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1403



    Description:
       i wrote this to a cop, and posted it on his myspace page. hell yeah


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    dotsim the shitdots
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    you better watch where you're steppin
    cuz im the shit
    you think you're a hit
    but you're not even a little bit
    but you are shit
    straigh up dont trip
    you know i got it
    all the hits
    are on my team
    and i share my gleam
    but not my bling
    not my rings
    never in on my schemes
    never know my dreams
    but we stay blowin smoke rings
    all over the place
    stay outta my face
    you a disgrace
    i leave a nasty taste
    in the air
    i aint fair
    i dont share
    i dont care
    about your drama
    or your problems
    do it big magnum condoms
    call me a hoodlum
    fuck your pig scum
    i go so dumb
    i have more fun
    than a alcoholic bum
    with a million booze shots
    straight tot he dome
    bitch go home
    bitch get gone
    you're weak
    my words leak
    and they stay silky sleek
    never cheap
    never weep
    call me a freak
    but you a black sheep
    a loner
    a poser
    a dozer
    you want her
    but i chose her
    and thats right
    i'll fight
    my hand aint light
    she was tight
    before i fliped it
    and hit that shit
    i saw your teeth grit
    you threw a fit
    but im the shit




    Submitted on 2007-06-16 17:59:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      That first commenters a douche bag. I like your rhymes even thought theyre not exactly the complex lyrical [censored] you hear nowadays. I'd like to hear you yourself read it cuz only then does the real rhythm come out.
    josh
    | Posted on 2007-11-02 00:00:00 | by MC white | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice twas scrumptious... but the part
    "all over the place
    stay outta my face
    you a disgrace
    i leave a nasty taste in the air
    i aint fair
    i dont share
    i dont care"
    I think that you should have pressed enter after taste...
    | Posted on 2007-06-18 00:00:00 | by Cricket | [ Reply to This ]
      well the titles kind of what should i say

    may be true


    joking

    itll be a good rap but certain lines havent got the rhyming sense following them i.e it gets cut off in between


    but still good work

    hope to see even better ones
    | Posted on 2007-06-17 00:00:00 | by SAMEER | [ Reply to This ]
      Here's to hoping those words are never set to music. Cheers!
    | Posted on 2007-06-17 00:00:00 | by eliwhitneyradio | [ Reply to This ]


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