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    dots Submission Name: Truth or Daredots
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    Author: emo-tastic
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 571/566/128
    Words: 60
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsTruth or Daredots
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    Poison ivy summers
    time spent in the woods
    headlights off
    feigned paranoia
    we play truth or dare for money

    By moonlight
    we are still children
    and we lend ourselves
    to ineptitude.

    all we want is to be touched

    and in a way
    the park is better when
    the lights are off

    sometimes the swings are enough




    Submitted on 2007-06-16 20:22:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Your poem is intruiging. It ponders the past as younger feelings are elicited from the enviroment in which the game takes place. Or is it a game? It is left to be said and can be interpreted many diffrent ways. It really speaks to me. Good poem.
    | Posted on 2007-06-24 00:00:00 | by WD | [ Reply to This ]
      The word "powerlessness" should never be used in a poem. A thesaurus could help you out here a little bit. You should probably also lose the period at the end of the first stanza, unless you'd rather add punctuation to the rest of the poem.
    | Posted on 2007-06-17 00:00:00 | by eliwhitneyradio | [ Reply to This ]


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