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    dots Submission Name: Perfekt Artdots
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    Author: ChrystalR
    ASL Info:    23/Female/Norway
    Elite Ratio:    5.14 - 126/121/58
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 687
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    Bytes: 996



    Description:
       About how one can love so deeply, what is neither perfect, nor healthy.


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    His reflection on a broken vase
    Pieces of shadow haunt the face
    To me so truly, perfect art
    A broken vase inside my heart

    Never perfect, never whole
    Shattered pieces of a soul
    Still the warmth will always be
    Warmer than the sun for me

    Question lies like trodden grass
    Perfect like my broken vase
    Tomorrow like the day before
    Broken vase and loving whore

    Thoughts of spring, breaking free
    But winter will not let us be
    Pieces lost, isnt found
    Lovers are forever bound

    But do I even long for spring
    knowing what the darkness bring?
    Vases filled with hidden shades
    Blessed in light, the beauty fades

    Though still broken, and obscure
    Eyes of passion, still his whore
    Insane perversity deep within
    Perfect art, is perfect sin





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      The surroundings of the feelings are full of guilt. It makes me feel unsure of the entity suffering inside. I have been in that situation story too. "Though still broken, and obscure
    Eyes of passion, still his whore
    Insane perversity deep within
    Perfect art, is perfect sin"
    This last part is good and bad being defined as the same. Take the good with the bad is the message I am getting from it. Nice writing. Good poem.





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