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    dots Submission Name: Death of a (god)Minddots
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    Author: Derrick Thomas
    ASL Info:    24/Male/Alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.11 - 21/59/39
    Words: 45
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 854
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 297



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    dotsDeath of a (god)Minddots
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    i done killed my mind

    it was a strange kind

    murder in a factory

    toys to gods

    those sexy greek bods

    i done killed my mind

    it was strange to find

    hallways and paths

    leading to you




    Submitted on 2007-06-16 22:49:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      well, this sounds sort of trippy, and deeply philosophical...
    i wonder sometimes what goes on in that strange and lovely mind of yours
    a rabbit hole that even acid head alice couldnt even find her way out of....
    i do like this, though i know you dont believe me...
    honestly, its not onew of my favorites, but it did sort of grab my attention

    my poetic epiphany

    xoxox
    | Posted on 2007-06-21 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, I don't think I ever killed my mind, but I definitely killed my common sense one time. It was quite similar to this.

    Very interesting write, I must say.
    | Posted on 2007-06-17 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      i done killed my mind

    its a weird line to me.
    makes me think of maybe... forrest gump or something in some southern state with their grammar a lil backward somewhat.
    but i like it.
    i cannot tell you why but it works.

    and yes. this is a struggle to understand but there are some pearls in here that cannot just be looked over.



    i done killed my mind

    it was strange to find

    hallways and paths

    leading to you




    i think its these last 4 lines that leave me wow'd. i know these hallways and paths in my own mind. and the way i always try to find new ones but somehow they all just lead to the same place/thought/person.
    like the way songs contain all my memories and some nights the wrong song will blow me to pieces...
    one night i swear the radio HATED me... every single song reminded me of the EXACT same thing... i got out a CD i had NEVER listened to before [i kinda buy them knowing ill listen to them one day ] and put it on and that immediately killed my mind and filled in all those hallways and paths that lead right back to him...

    perhaps killing the mind would make it easier...
    though maybe only temporarily...
    | Posted on 2007-06-17 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      I dont know what the hell that means, but I like it. Now I am going to a pm to ask you what it means.
    | Posted on 2007-06-16 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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