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    dots Submission Name: Reachingdots
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    Author: Clarkie
    ASL Info:    18/F/FL
    Elite Ratio:    5.33 - 101/76/36
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
    Total Views: 748
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 592



    Description:
       This is three years old, and yes, it's angsty and very 'oh woe is me, I am a pained teenager', but I think it's on the better side of that genre, so here it is.


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    dotsReachingdots
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    I tried
    I'm so sorry
    I failed

    To understand

    To know
    How far
    Was too far

    To reach for you

    I used both my hands
    All my heart
    Too much

    Of myself

    I have given
    All I can give
    To you

    Not enough

    For me to heal your wounds
    When you'll only
    Pack them with salt

    To keep them wide open

    I am reaching

    But reaching

    Is never

    Enough




    Submitted on 2007-06-17 01:23:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is good. It reflects what poetry is all about; to take a very human situation and reveal it with drama and emotion.

    We've all been in this situation before, and understand what you are writing about, and you have done it well. To give our all for someone we care about, and be left with the feeling that it's not enough......
    | Posted on 2010-01-29 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      We must reach for the stars, because no man is an island. Well, it is always better to give than receive. Sometimes, love does not return. Then, we must face reality, and choose to move on with our lives. No pain...no gain. Poem possesses clarity and sincerity Poem is a beautiful expression about humanity and flaws of mankind. Nice stuff! Job well done! Keep sharing!
    | Posted on 2007-10-16 00:00:00 | by FireFly747 | [ Reply to This ]


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