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    dots Submission Name: A Difficult Choicedots
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    Author: Lord Bane
    ASL Info:    24/M/Isle of Wight, UK
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 40/81/50
    Words: 188
    Class/Type: Story/Serious
    Total Views: 684
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    Bytes: 1163



    Description:
       This is from the story that starts with The Warplord Saga - The Prologue. The set up for this is the allies ship is attacked, and has crashed on the planet's surface. Shaun and John are both missing, and Kelly is John's girlfriend. (Note: John has feelings for Kelly too) If this seems a bit terrible, note all three tales may get rewritten. I'm deliberately leaving this on a cliffhanger (no pun intended)


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    dotsA Difficult Choicedots
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    Kelly woke up and saw the craft had crashed. Most of the passengers were outside, trying to regain their bearings. As she counted the survivors she realised John and Shaun were missing, she couldn't see them anywhere.
    Stepping out of the wreckage, and making her excuses to the others, she began searching. She knew a fall from that high would probably kill them, but she had to be sure. She eventually reached a cliff face, and made a terrible discovery. Only just holding on to the edge of the cliff was John, who was badly injured, and on a ledge to the left and slightly further down was Shaun, out cold and also badly hurt.
    "John, hold on. I'll pull you up."
    "No," he said. "You can't save both of us, save Shaun instead."
    "But what will we do if you're dead? We need you."
    "Kelly, this universe can survive without me, but you can't survive without Shaun. Save him, he's more important."
    She looked between the two. John was right, she wouldn't have time to save both of them. She had to choose quickly.....
    To Be Continued




    Submitted on 2007-06-17 10:29:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      in your description you said that kelly is john's girlfriend but that john has feelings for kelly too....

    i think you meant that kelly is shaun's girlfriend but john has feelings for her....

    and....

    i'm guessing she saves john.
    | Posted on 2008-07-24 00:00:00 | by was_i_ever_real | [ Reply to This ]


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