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    dots Submission Name: Firedots
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    Author: Roula
    ASL Info:    18/female
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 46/64/45
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsFiredots
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    The flowers bloom a day late, the sun sets too early.
    There is no beauty shining through.

    The spark never started a fire
    So itís time to search for new company-
    Iím giving up on reason.

    Iím running so fast, with no time to look back.
    Itís so hard to breath, and I cannot see you anymore.

    Iím feeling empty.
    Iím loosing hope.

    Yet as I drift farther away, I smile,
    Realizing that anywhere I go,
    I take you with me.

    Stop and breathe.

    Is it possible that youíre on fire?




    Submitted on 2007-06-17 11:18:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really liked this, it was original and, I thought really sad at the same time
    | Posted on 2007-06-17 00:00:00 | by Mina Liston | [ Reply to This ]


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