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    dots Submission Name: A New Collectivedots
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    Author: emo-tastic
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    dotsA New Collectivedots
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    I'll bet it takes me a week
    to have you pinned down on that chair
    eyes closed
    thinking my name
    your lips tracing the letters
    on my forehead

    Headlights off
    armrests up
    clothing in motion
    we'll bet on each other
    this will be a new collective
    choose your name
    and I will find it with my skin

    Push me tighter
    and stay where you are
    let me collect my due.




    Submitted on 2007-06-17 22:24:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      first, i like the pic you have up. cool. anywhoo, i like this piece. could yopu explain it more on my page. thanks .





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    | Posted on 2007-06-18 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]


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