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    dots Submission Name: Burning passions Hidden Skies.dots
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    Author: Jingles
    ASL Info:    19.m.canada
    Elite Ratio:    2.08 - 18/60/36
    Words: 207
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Passion
    Total Views: 995
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1309



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    dotsBurning passions Hidden Skies.dots
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    Don't take your chances tonight, It's sure to be our last.
    We'll watch it wash away, Ashes of disfigured pasts.
    The words we could never speak, Love walks hand in hand with fear.
    Let's stop to watch it burn, The light is thread around your lips.
    You look so pretty tonight..
    So pretty tonight..
    I could watch for hours, Don't turn your eyes away.
    Just try to enjoy the view, It's such a pretty sight.
    Burning skies never looked so good.
    Never looked so good.
    We watched.
    And saw as everything we knew came to an end.
    Everything but me and you.
    I'm holding your hand through these flames.
    We were alone on the hilltops.
    And felt only comfort, As the clouds in our atmosphere were set ablaze.
    Time is all we have, And we sure as hell aren't going to miss this.
    Your fingers graced my lips, I swear nothing ever tasted so damn sweet.
    We watched for hours, We watched til there was nothing left.
    Only my silhouette resting in your babyblue gaze.
    Your skin so soft, Your kiss so sweet.
    The words we could never speak, Now spoken.
    My love for you burns with the skies.
    Your skin so soft.
    Your kiss so sweet.




    Submitted on 2007-06-17 23:46:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    | Posted on 2007-08-14 00:00:00 | by Jingles | [ Reply to This ]
      I love you, this song is way more than perfect. Four in the morning inspirations last forever, baby. That was for me. I couldn't have asked for anything more. And obviously, there are others who agree with me. You're sheer talent. I love it.

    It's perfect.

    Love,
    Alice. ( L )
    | Posted on 2007-06-27 00:00:00 | by alicethechronic | [ Reply to This ]
      aww this is beyond AMAZING.... i love it all how you have a way with words how it all flows so nicely.. omg this is an amaxing write... i am literally speachless to praze you on a nice job..

    ~!*jackie*!~
    | Posted on 2007-06-19 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
      i cant get the flow to this. i usually can because i wrote some lyrics but i dont get the flow. i do like the repetition. some people dont but it brings out your point more. keep posting. nice work.




    tina
    | Posted on 2007-06-18 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]


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