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    dots Submission Name: Suredearnoproblemdots
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    Author: Fougene
    ASL Info:    17/m/Saskatoon Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.57 - 23/22/39
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 613
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1308



    Description:
       Experimental poem with slight resemblances to earlier poets.


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    dotsSuredearnoproblemdots
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    Milk?
    Suredearnoproblem
    Some groceries
    Suredearnoproblem
    We need diapers
    Suredearnoproblem
    Take out
    Suredearnoproblem
    The garbage
    Suredearnoproblem

    Why didn't you
    Sorrydeariforgot
    Get the groceries
    Sorrydeariforgot
    What about the
    Sorrydeariforgot
    Garbage
    Sorrydeariforgot

    Honey, let's talk
    Ohhoneyi'msosorry
    Leave me alone
    Ohhoneyi'msosorry
    You're giving me
    Ohhoneyi'msosorry
    A headache
    Ohhoneyi'msosorry

    Sorry about before
    Iloveyoutoodear
    I know you're busy
    Iloveyoutoodear
    And you love me
    Iloveyoutoodear
    I want to tell you
    Iloveyoutoodear
    How much I love you
    Iloveyoutoodear

    Oh honey
    Whateveryouwanthoney
    Hold me close
    Whateveryouwanthoney
    Kiss me softly
    Whateveryouwanthoney
    Oh, that's good
    Whateveryouwanthoney
    You're so beautiful
    Whateveryouwanthoney
    You make me happy
    Whateveryouwanthoney
    Could you please get me some
    Whateveryouwanthoney
    Milk?
    Suredearnoproblem




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