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Author: bloodydreamer27
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Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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Not very good, I know. But it's from a long a year or so ago.


All the heartbreak and all the pain,
All the words you said in vain.
All the things you lied about,
They all just make me want to shout.

All the scars and all the tears,
All of the awaken fears.
All the things you just had to say,
Make me not want to live another day.

All the knives and all the blood,
All the drops that make a thud.
All the things i hate about you,
Make me not know what to do.

Submitted on 2007-06-18 11:49:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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