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Here's To The Past


Author: Raivn
ASL Info:    33/f/al
Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222 /916 /231
Words: 102
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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Longing for days gone by...


Here's To The Past



Here's to the decisions we make
When we find ourselves alone
When the long, hot, and tedious days
Lead us further from where we belong

Here's to the dreams we abandon
When we make the choice to leave
Never knowing we could somehow lose ourselves
And everything in which we believe

Here's to the lives that we once had
Where happiness wasn't that far away
Here's to the innocence lost
Here's to all the wrong things we say

Here's to the countless relationships
That we knew could never last
Here's to healing and moving on
Here's to the past.




Submitted on 2007-06-18 19:16:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Wow. I definatly understand what she sees in you. Very touching... im impressed.
| Posted on 2008-08-31 00:00:00 | by lobisch123 | [ Reply to This ]
  This write is really great. Emotions are intertwined in every stanza. I LOVE this poem!
It is short, and well thought out!

very nice

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~mag
| Posted on 2007-09-15 00:00:00 | by Magger32 | [ Reply to This ]
  Perfect description of meloncholy and regret. The yearning for another time in the past, for who you were in the past. I like it.
| Posted on 2007-07-22 00:00:00 | by Alura | [ Reply to This ]
  i definantly thought about all my friends that i grew up with and consider my family...i could almost picture this as a song. really really heartwarming to be reminded of all the good times, and even the bad...because no matter what all you have are the people you love. thanks for the sweet reminder. good work. <3
| Posted on 2007-06-19 00:00:00 | by cre_dia | [ Reply to This ]
  when i read this i pictured.....

me sitting in a dim lit bar with a few close friends and a mug of beer in my head bitterly giving cheers while saying this poem.

why i pictured this not too sure but it's what it sounds like to me. like a sarcastic toast to the world that speeds us by leaving us in the dust of boredom. so for that i always have to raise my glass, cause i do feel that way at times. woooo!
| Posted on 2007-06-19 00:00:00 | by lark | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a very well concieved and thought out poem which strikes just the right note throughout, wondefully meditative and thoughtful (who could not have empathy for all or at least some of it) brilliantly written with a twice potent final line...loved it, loved it, absolutely loved it ... bravo ... bravo. .. bravo ... michael
| Posted on 2007-06-18 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]


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