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    dots Submission Name: On The Horndots
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    Author: The Gadfly
    ASL Info:    51/M/Moreno Valley, CA
    Elite Ratio:    3.55 - 1035/1330/360
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
    Total Views: 119
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    Bytes: 893



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    dotsOn The Horndots
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    In the midst of two roads parted,
    where the signs all warned of danger,
    with the engine sparked, she started
    through the lanes of life, she darted,
    running down both friend and stranger.

    In her anger, blind, she waited
    at the stop sign of her choosing.
    On the brake, she stood ill-fated
    idled hours, she hesitated,
    giving up no ground, refusing.

    Failing fuel, the engine stalling;
    stops and starts marked her denial.
    The exhaust fumes smelled appalling,
    rising gauges,' needles falling,
    through the backfires of each trial.

    On the horn the protests bleated
    in cacophonous conniving.
    Empty driver's seat conceded,
    one lone occupant back-seated.
    Please move forward, THEN START DRIVING!


    The Gadfly




    Submitted on 2007-06-19 07:40:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      very nice, a great metaphor for life, the waiting on making the right decision of where to go. sometimes going there on whim, and sometimes having to take hours to decide if you are much too afraid of being the "driver." I also like how you hinted toward the fact that sometimes you can drive too much and after driving through life for so many miles you have to climb into the backseat and rest from the great beating of reality. tis the finest way to make a decision, from the back seat where you can see everything.
    | Posted on 2007-07-16 00:00:00 | by John Ratliff | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice one, the 1st para feels to me something like the old piece "the road not taken" :)
    overall its NICE!! super duper! :)

    Always enjoy reading your work.

    Take care & God Bless,
    Dennis
    | Posted on 2007-06-19 00:00:00 | by StylerDen | [ Reply to This ]
      this was interesting to say the least. i liked it in the fact that it was easily relate to. made me think to when i get to certain points in my life (more often than not) where im just plowing through this event or that relationship and know it's all going to shti but can't shake it. not sure if im on target with what you were getting at but thats what it meant to me.

    bad ass poem nonetheless but then again thats a safe bet with you. not too sure if i understood the very end, the 'lone occupant back-seated' but hell cant understand everything. woooo!
    | Posted on 2007-06-19 00:00:00 | by lark | [ Reply to This ]



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