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    dots Submission Name: My hidden lifedots
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    Author: isuperhero
    ASL Info:    14, female, WA
    Elite Ratio:    2.31 - 13/15/16
    Words: 201
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 730
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    Bytes: 1231



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       This is what I would say to my dad if he would ever listen to me.


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    dotsMy hidden lifedots
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    You say I'm like a roller coaster
    sometimes up and sometimes down
    its just that I have to fake happiness
    around you
    sometimes you see my sadness pushing through

    Forced to live a life that I hate to death
    Forced to wear things I'm uncomfortable in
    Forced to live my life behind closed doors
    And you wont see, my hidden life

    You say that I am disrespectful
    but I cant even wear pants
    cuz I respect you too much
    to hurt you like this
    I wanna live my own life
    but just to appease
    I do what I want without
    you seeing me

    Forced to live a life that I hate to death
    Forced to look like an unruly kid
    Forced to live my life behind closed doors
    and you wont see, my hidden life

    I want to make you proud
    but it's not happening now
    I want to see you smile
    but I cant figure out how

    And I'll force myself
    to live a life that I hate
    force myself to look like I'm a mistake
    I am forced to live behind closed doors
    and you wont see me
    i'll live my hidden life




    Submitted on 2007-06-19 10:24:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      awww i like this it needs to flow better but other than that its great...

    Druecilla
    | Posted on 2007-06-19 00:00:00 | by Druecilla | [ Reply to This ]


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