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    dots Submission Name: Nightmear'ishdots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 186
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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       i have these all the time and its the same guy that scares me shittless.. and yet he dosen't scare


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    dotsNightmear'ishdots
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    This trail you have me on…
    This path you have me stuck on

    Is so horrid reminding me of secure things I long to forget.
    I begin to feel as if I’m in a fool’s paradise
    Seeing my fears unravel in front of myself...

    And there.
    There you are.

    I’ve missed you so much
    Yet I still despise you has I always have.

    I'm stumbling now...
    Over all these roots
    And the leaves follow me as I fall

    I slam into the ground.
    And you follow my lead...

    “Now Jackie, you see what you have caused”?
    “You see what you have done”?

    “Without me Jackie you'll get no where”
    “Without me you'll be nobody”
    “You've really screwed up this time”

    “And there's no way in hell I'm going to go do damage control”!!!!!

    Now is when this fool’s paradise begins to diminish itself
    As I begin to stand…

    I see it was only a nightmare…
    But uhh...ohh… it all felt so dam vivid




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      i like it. keep posting. i have enjoyed this piece. i have had many nightmares this last month. almost every night. if you know a cure for them please tell me. i'm dying for a night of peaceful sleep.





    tina
    | Posted on 2007-06-19 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      i like it. keep posting. i have enjoyed this piece. i have had many nightmares this last month. almost every night. if you know a cure for them please tell me. i'm dying for a night of peaceful sleep.





    tina
    | Posted on 2007-06-19 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Excellent description about a nightmare, and a delightful write! You have a developing talent Jackie that shows great promise!
    | Posted on 2007-06-19 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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