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    dots Submission Name: Consequences of goodbyedots
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    Author: Randa04
    ASL Info:    19/Female/NC
    Elite Ratio:    1.64 - 21/63/77
    Words: 58
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 679
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    Bytes: 335



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       Not finished yet.. If you would like to add on to this..please do. : ) I'm not sure how I want to finish this...Suggestions would be lovely : )


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    dotsConsequences of goodbyedots
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    Your words lie empty with no truth to be found..
    I've wasted so much of my time just wandering around..
    I tried to find that piece of me;
    The person you said I used to be..

    Times have changed and so have you//
    I never saw it coming, You say I've changed too.
    In this




    Submitted on 2007-06-19 20:02:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Is that a pun on the words in the first line? How cute.
    So far it's good, but since I'm having writers block myself I can't really give any suggestions.

    But I know you're on the way so keep writing and don't abandon it.
    | Posted on 2007-06-19 00:00:00 | by LovelyGoddess | [ Reply to This ]


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