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    dots Submission Name: I had hoped you'd care..dots

    Author: EbonyBlood
    ASL Info:    14/F/Can.
    Elite Ratio:    3.7 - 79/79/73
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
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       Finally fixed the typo..

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    dotsI had hoped you'd care..dots

    I sat alone on the bench
    Waiting for you to come outside
    I cleaned my hair and worn my favorite dress
    Today I turned 15 the same age as you
    I waited happily for you to see
    How pretty I looked just for you
    I didn't do this for me, I did this for a crush
    A stupid love of someone who never even noticed
    I cry myself to sleep and wonder why
    I had hoped you'd care
    I tried so hard, to look pretty just for you
    I smiled hard only to have you walk by without even a glance
    My heart sank to hell, and there it has stayed for many years to come
    My pain will never be seen, and will never be heard
    My love for you will just remain below and hidden from this world
    Oh boy why did you do this to me,
    I had hoped you'd care....

    Submitted on 2007-06-19 21:46:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      You did an excellent Job with this write
    I feel like I am taken immediately back to my very first crush
    It is so hard for a child or a teenager (sorry) to understand True Love
    I know a lot of relationships that are now my age (38) that started out as young teenagers in Love so it is not true when people say its just a crush all the time because you are so young
    Remain Strong
    If this Love was meant to be it will be there in the Future that I Promise You
    God Bless

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    | Posted on 2007-06-25 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      ohhh the memories of my first crush just come flowing back... the endless crying nights, the way id get dressed up for him to notice.. its a part of everygirls story/life put into a lovely verse...
    once again its amazing how u had put the words to look so powerful!
    believe me 6 years after this feeling..u would be somewhere half around the world somewhere u never imagined to be and still be wondering 'what if..' 'only if he looked..' or 'wonder where he is...'

    | Posted on 2007-06-20 00:00:00 | by sharu | [ Reply to This ]
      Eh. Pretty standard, I guess. You see that kind of thing everywhere.

    Unfortunately, I can't sit here laughing about the style of it when I know full well what it is to be shot right out of the sky. It hurts to hit the ground.

    I don't think there's anyone around our age who hasn't experienced it at least once. The important thing is to keep going, and hope you find the right one eventually.

    You will.

    | Posted on 2007-06-20 00:00:00 | by crimson echo | [ Reply to This ]

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