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    dots Submission Name: Hard Realization ***Revised***dots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 342
    Class/Type: Rant/Love
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       Dave wasn't able to get sleep last night due to his right knee wich became twice the size as the other by ealier this morning.. i was awaken with him telling me he "needs" go to the emergencey room :( I'm at work!!!


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    dotsHard Realization ***Revised***dots
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    This process is necessary...
    It is unavoidable

    And I hate it all soo much!

    I'm left in the dark and this has not yet happened with he and I
    I'm left in a spiral downward direction,
    Which I have become uncomfortably fimilar with

    As I drive to work knowing they are poking him with needles
    Seeing him grinding his teeth because of his dislike for those needles
    Poking him several times with a different needle each time
    Simply wanting to find a solution for this medical emergency…

    And now as I drive to work,
    All our days spent together
    All our smiles
    All our laughter comes back to me…

    RaCiNg throughout my mind...

    Tears, accumulate beneath these eyes of mine,
    And yet a smile appears on my face!

    Happy for the times I spent with such a wonderful guy... my soul mate
    And yet upset that it may be over!

    Here, right now, I feel it is appropriate of me
    To ask the Almighty Lord above us all,
    Pray to him…

    **My hand collapse within one another**
    **Joining fingers with the other hand**

    I begin to whisper...
    Please Lord I beg of you, to keep this soul mate of mine close to you
    To hold him and comfort him when I cannot,
    To keep him safe the way you have always kept him safe…

    Still whipering to you Lord...
    I ask you this, with all my heart
    For it is filled with love for this certain someone!
    He, Lord is my missing puzzle piece and without him...

    Without my soul mate
    My missing puzzle piece…

    Life has no meaning
    Life has no point

    So again I ask of you, treat my soul mate as you'd treat your son!
    Treat him with the love and respect he deserves…




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      This is a deep! love Jackz, it's amazing; it shows your depth to such a point that I can totally relate and respect,
    And of coarse my dear friend you know I believe your intentions are headed a well founded direction.
    I guess my thoughts are everyone will show you a dark side; If they can speak in words to us then they are only a man.
    I'm sure we can all learn to love imperfections,
    As without them; life wouldn't be the perfect thing that I ultimately perceive it to be,
    I wish nothing but the best for you in this whole world girl; never forget that,
    Congratulations on the set date and your in my prayers.


    keep writing Jackz; I have a great admiration for the direction your headed:)

    Love Matt
    | Posted on 2007-06-23 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]


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