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    dots Submission Name: Infidelitydots

    Author: ParanoidParadox
    ASL Info:    22/m/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.31 - 89/92/41
    Words: 214
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 726
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       Comparing love to a dance, infidelity to erosion and song.

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    Dance in formulations of the truth
    Pirouetting around what happened
    Focusing only upon the missed steps
    Aggressive and mournful all at once
    A pattern of accuse and deny
    Drown passion out in a choir of anger
    The words unclear, but the purpose known
    Complacency through inconsistency
    Knowing that he'll never follow through
    Legs weary, but the twirls continue
    Running deep gouges into the ground
    As excuses are being written
    This masquerade comes to a great halt
    Bringing light to that damage that's done

    Reconstruct your lies
    Lock yourself in
    Reconstruct your lies
    Hide within yourself
    Reconstruct your lies
    Before you are found out
    Reconstruct your lies
    Stuck within this hell

    Weathered egos crash once again
    Ebbing and eroding each other
    Like the river upon a mountain
    Seething its way to the bottom
    Affection submerged in bitter words
    Broken hands can only falter again
    Finding escape in nothing at all
    All has been said, but nothing is done
    No one has lost, and no one has won
    The monument has yet to collapse
    But the cracks are starting to show

    To rebuild is to destroy
    Fix your shattered ploy
    To rebuild is to destroy
    Memories of faded joy
    To rebuild is to destroy
    Thrown away like and old toy

    Switch partners

    Submitted on 2007-06-20 22:09:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      bravo bravo. i adore how you melted from dance to the ocean and back. the deep groves that never truely heal. how tasteful. how eloquent. especially those anyone who has had a brush with that particular tango.
    | Posted on 2007-06-21 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      I am having a hard time coming up with a meaning to this. The symbolism is definently there though. This one is a real thinker, it may take me some time to realize what it means to me. Solid.
    | Posted on 2007-06-21 00:00:00 | by HeavyMetalHero | [ Reply to This ]

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