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    dots Submission Name: Waited Too Longdots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 181
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 500
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1156



    Description:
       i wrote this for someone else. i got a piece about him way earlier in my writings on this site but we met up again and i had to let him know that i didnt really come up here for him. i used to think i loved him. but i look back at it and i see what i got now, that was high school shit compared to now. im too good to allow myself to still be stuck with those other guys....


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    dotsWaited Too Longdots
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    I fell in love,
    But we fell out too quick.
    One night stand,
    Wasnt that thick.

    Nothing to hide,
    But the lies in your heart.
    Nothing was earned,
    But we still fell apart.

    Years after days,
    And still you kept watch.
    Wasn't 'til I came back,
    That you had a second shot.

    But then I turned around,
    And I saw what I had.
    I had to be real,
    I said I got a man.

    You said it didnt matter.
    No one had to know.
    But I said it wouldnt happen,
    Look what i got to show.

    Love all around me.
    Someone else who cares.
    You couldnt even touch this,
    He told me not to share.

    You waited to long,
    It's not gonna work.
    What else could I say?
    I was just there to flirt.

    So two years later,
    You want to try again.
    But I already told you,
    We're just good friends.

    At one point in life,
    You were the one that I loved.
    But after so long,
    I already got a glove.




    Submitted on 2007-06-21 17:06:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is a great piece. THe flow is great and your worlding is amazing. I think Bobby K is right about this having the makings of a song. The meaning behind this shows alot, great piece. Keep writing.


    Sarah
    | Posted on 2007-06-22 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm not sure, are you telling a story or sending a mesage? This has the makings of song, and I think the fourth stanza could be a little smoother.

    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2007-06-21 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]


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