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    dots Submission Name: Between earth and heaven,,,,dots
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    Author: withblindedeyez
    ASL Info:    19/m/nc
    Elite Ratio:    2.57 - 83/121/58
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsBetween earth and heaven,,,,dots
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    Somebody help Iíve been cursed its time to go and fuck this hurts
    I tried to climb, but heavens gates and tall and strong
    And supposedly the father is forgiving all my wrongs
    Iíve lived my life full of sin never thought twice
    Just walked, crawled, scratched, down this path with these hands
    But here I am stuck again in this world of pretend
    My words, verbs, and adjectives are taking form
    Of a bird build of my many sins and I am the worm
    Trying to crawl out of this hell I feel I donít deserve.
    These words become razors slicing flesh as I try to take flight
    But Iím felt bleeding under the moonlightÖ.




    Submitted on 2007-06-21 20:34:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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