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    dots Submission Name: I Hate You!dots
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    Author: EbonyBlood
    ASL Info:    14/F/Can.
    Elite Ratio:    3.7 - 79/79/73
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Misc/I hate you
    Total Views: 956
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 660



    Description:
       Uhm..wrote this is school. For no reason really...


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    dotsI Hate You!dots
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    Here I am alone again
    thinking about everything that has been said
    I'll sit in silence until the dawn
    When everything awakens with the sun
    My heart will melt like a vampire

    The pain will become numb
    And I will turn into nothing
    Why is it you don't love me?
    Why is it you never listen?
    How I cried for you!
    How I tried for you!

    I'd live and die for you!
    But, You turn away like a bitch
    And move on like a whore
    Don't speak those shit words of love
    When all you fucking want is sex and money!

    I HATE YOU!




    Submitted on 2007-06-21 22:10:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      So much anger Erin. I like it except the vampire part doesn't seem to go with it. I felt like ducking when I read this just in case you might have thrown something at me haha.
    | Posted on 2007-06-27 00:00:00 | by LadyDoragon | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this, it's very cool. Blunt and to the point, getting [censored] off your chest. The rhythmn and versing is very enjoyable to read. I can appreciate the musical quality to this piece. Well done.
    | Posted on 2007-06-22 00:00:00 | by ssssss | [ Reply to This ]
      This is one very angry write
    I can feel the sadness you feel quite easily with your words
    The only thing I would do different and I stress this is totally up to you is take out the curse words and use your imagination to show your emotions
    The curse words just make this write sound very angry and take away from the sadness I believe this write is meant to show
    Excellent Job!!
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-06-22 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, you have found the time to spew some true feelings of dislike and mistrust for a young lad who has obviously done you wrong. Time to move on, there is someone out there who will find the joy of just being with you.
    | Posted on 2007-06-22 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]


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