I like this, it's very cool. Blunt and to the point, getting [censored] off your chest. The rhythmn and versing is very enjoyable to read. I can appreciate the musical quality to this piece. Well done.
This is one very angry write
I can feel the sadness you feel quite easily with your words
The only thing I would do different and I stress this is totally up to you is take out the curse words and use your imagination to show your emotions
The curse words just make this write sound very angry and take away from the sadness I believe this write is meant to show
Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
Wow, you have found the time to spew some true feelings of dislike and mistrust for a young lad who has obviously done you wrong. Time to move on, there is someone out there who will find the joy of just being with you.