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    dots Submission Name: Wishing for Her Love { Part Eleven dots
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    Author: EbonyBlood
    ASL Info:    14/F/Can.
    Elite Ratio:    3.7 - 79/79/73
    Words: 390
    Class/Type: Story/Love
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       Just as I promised. Part Eleven on Friday.


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    dotsWishing for Her Love { Part Eleven dots
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    I'd fallen asleep again. I woke up to find myself on the couch downstairs.
    I remembered than, that Rick and I had been watching The Lion King.

    I sat up, cleaned up my hair and brushed the sleep out of my eyes. I paused, noticing a strange silence throughout the house. I stood and slowly walked up the stairs, my sock feet making almost no noise.

    I peeked into Claire and Jeff's room. Claire was sound asleep. Rick and his family had gone home I guessed. I found myself feeling lonely again, and wandered around quietly.

    Soon, I headed downstairs to do a puzzle. I was unsure of whether to finish one, or start a new one.
    In the end, I decided to finish the one Rick and I had started.
    After a while I popped upstairs, My stomach growled for food. I had thought about it, and I didn't remember eating yesterday. I had always shook my head saying I wasn't hungry.

    I headed up stairs again to find Claire in the kitchen; cooking.
    "Hi." I smiled, "How's..Dad?"
    "Oh, Fine. He just had a small asmtha attack. He'll be home tomorrow."
    I hugged Claire tightly. "I was scared."
    "Yes, I know Kitten. Rick told me, so I came home."
    "H-He called you?"
    "Yes," She smiled, rubbing the back of my head lightly. "He was worried about you."

    I grinned, "What's for lunch..?"
    "Soup, and Sandwiches. Afterwards you can help me make cookies for Jeff. His favorite."
    "Kay!"
    I felt my happiness fly again. Jeff was Ok. And he would be for awhile. Excitement was taking over, and I decided to make it a happy return.

    After lunch, I bounced to my room and made him a card. And a banner. Claire agreed with them, and helped me put them up.

    I was happy she didn't mind me calling her Mom, or Jeff Dad.
    Because I didn't feel I needed to call my Birth mother, a mother. I guess by this time..She might have had more kids. Though, I wondered.. If she had kept them, or not.
    Would she ask to have me back someday?

    I re-asked the question, Would Claire give me back?




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      i like ending u through in there
    | Posted on 2007-06-23 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]


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