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    Author: Timmay
    ASL Info:    16/male/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 2/4/4
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 619
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 636



    Description:
       A random poem suppose to originally be about acne, however, it may describe more then that.


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    Mountaints to some, but spots to others,
    Temporal imperfections that sully the flesh.
    Mounds of mundane elements, best not bothered,
    Causes of clandestine remarks.
    But look deeper and the truth can be seen,
    Patience is needed and eyes unhurt by the obscene,
    Such acceptance is rare in a life led by appearance
    Yet once found is never forgotten.
    Forsake the shell and embrace the divine
    For this is happiness like a sweet wine.
    So those spots and mountains matter not,
    Despite social creed.
    Errors one day will rot
    And bring forth euphoric seeds.




    Submitted on 2007-06-22 15:25:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Acne, not

    I don't know, man, but I liked the rhyme and the rhyming, so good work. Take a gander at my work as well, if you please!!!
    | Posted on 2007-06-22 00:00:00 | by illuminate11 | [ Reply to This ]


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