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    dots Submission Name: As The Blood Flows...dots
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    Author: Timmay
    ASL Info:    16/male/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 2/4/4
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 706
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    Description:
       A poem about the possibilities going through the mind after slitting one's wrists, cynical, I know.


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    dotsAs The Blood Flows...dots
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    As The Blood Flows
    As the blood flows...
    Depression is replaced by happiness
    As the blood flows...
    Nostalgia sinks its claws of vanity into the unsuspecting mind
    As the blood flows...
    Mistakes are rewritten
    As the blood flows...
    Lost characters are found, unlost characters are lost and the self is divided
    As the blood flows...
    The choice is rethought
    As the blood flows...
    The mind is decided, no longer looking back
    As the blood flows...
    Clairvoyance reveals all, past, present, future
    As the blood stops...
    Darkness




    Submitted on 2007-06-22 15:28:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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